Is my sonnet allright ?

valiant attempt- but there is a few serious flaws. 1) leather can be tan but it is actually blue. although it can be tanned then dyed tan. 2)if hair be as twine would make a lot more sense than if hairs are twine. 3)the word pleasant shouldn't be used one line after the other.( i would use it for the feel but not the aroma line )also i don't think suggesting his breath stinks is in the best taste . again you use pleasing for the third reference. find a new adjective and pronoun. now to add more quips to your poem- choose a reference that is on the ground if your going to speak of his trampling( not tramps - silly that's a different meaning anyway) like a gazelle or a cat they are graceful in their walking a bird is not a graceful walker at all therefor the reference doesn't exactly gel- does it. and i doubt you have always known him have you ? therefore you cant have always known its pure but have known since your eyes have met or something to that avail. and love is not bottomless it can be endless or endearing or unlimited or something that has - again a true reference. and i don't think cure is what your trying to say. that is like saying your a co- dependent. not in love. it suggest abuse. I would definatly change that- unless all the insults were to line up to co-dependence. In that case it is better but if you were trying to define pure love - it fails on a great big level. that last line is a disaster. sorry - But did you want a lie - applause? or true critic? At least I am honest. But I think to try your hand at poetry - and to truly be good at it - you need to have rough drafts and rewrites. Just as love is - it takes work. effort. and a bit of pride swallowing. enjoy your romance. and good luck with your writing.